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Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The debate on the use or disuse of capital
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 has remained a major topic of discussion amongst people.
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 both sides hold strong and valid views, I think capital
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 should be utilised for major crimes because it is an assurance that
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 a criminal can no longer offend. A common view amongst groups against capital sanction is that rehabilitation is a better course of action rather than revenge, and it argues that being in the correctional system for a long period will possibly prevent repeat crimes. Studies have shown that capital
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 is a guaranteed crime deterrent, because it has caused some criminals to be less desperate and reckless. The use of capital
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 drastic, can help protect society and individuals from violent criminals
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 as terrorists, serial killers and murderous psychopaths.
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 is because it prevents repeat or
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 offences after they are caught. Capital trial
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 provides victims and their families a sense of justice and closure when it is carried out.
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, several court interviews have shown satisfaction from victims
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and their relatives who feel the violent criminal was properly punished for the crimes committed against them.
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, capital trial not only reduces repeat
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,
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 prevents an increase in the number of violent
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 I agree with the use of capital
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, it is important that it should be reserved for only extremely violent
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, and that
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 cases should be extensively scrutinised without bias to prevent mistakes with indictments.
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 way, there is an assurance that the human rights of the
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 can be protected
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 protecting the members of society.

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task response
Discuss both sides more evenly. Add at least one clear point for the other view and compare with your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas flow better. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence and connect ideas with linking words.
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Use simple words only. Some words are not in the top 100. Keep words easy and clear.
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Give concrete examples that are easy to follow and relevant to the point you make.
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Clear view on the topic and a position taken in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
One idea per paragraph most of the time and a logical order.
content
The essay tries to link crime and safety to the idea of justice for victims.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • deterrent
  • crime
  • serious offenses
  • justice
  • victims
  • closure
  • life imprisonment
  • rehabilitation
  • legal system
  • fairness
  • wrongful convictions
  • moral
  • public opinion
  • perspectives
  • debate
  • effective
  • punishment
  • families
  • contribute
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