You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

Dear Tommy, I hope you're well. I'm writing with exciting news that
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bought a new home in June. You know that I have wanted to buy a house
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a long time in Delhi. Guess what? I made it. It has two rooms with one kitchen and two bathrooms. There is a small garden with beautiful flowers and enough parking space for my car. It's
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as my dream house. I am so glad that I've very kind neighbours. Everyone came to meet me and offer many things as a welcome. There is a public park in the society, where I enjoy with new little friends and do exercise. I'll be so happy if you can come here during the summer vacation so that I can show you my place and spend time together. It will be great fun. See you soon Keep in touch, Jyoti

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grammar
Fix 'i' to 'I' and Gram. Start with a cap on the first word in each sentence.
organization
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with the house, then the place, then the invite.
coherence
Use simple link words to show order, like 'and', 'then', 'also'.
task
Be clear about why you moved and what the house gives you.
tone
Keep a warm tone and end with a kind goodbye.
spelling
Check spelling: neighbours, where needed.
tone
The letter has a warm tone and a good greeting.
content
It shows what the new home is like and some features.
purpose
The closing is friendly and invites a visit.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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