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Band 6.5

The graph shows the transport modes in European city between 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart depicts different
transports
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transport
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 uses in a city located in Europe from 1960 to 1980. What stands out is that the highest
percentage
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 of total travellers over all the dates is for car use in
2000
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2000,
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 with 35
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percent
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per cent
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,
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;
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nevertheless
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 it was
also
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 one of the lowest at 5
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1960. Looking at another mode that
vehicules
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vehicles
, the proportion of travellers
which
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who
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 took the bus rises from 17
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1960 to 25
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1980 and ultimately returns to almost the initial value with 15
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percent
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 in 2000. Turning to
anothers
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other
 transport modes,
bike
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 and
foot
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 percentages are following the same pattern, they both decrease.
However
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, the decline is different. The
percentage
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 for
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bike
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bikes
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 starts from 25
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1960 to 20
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percent
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per cent
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 in
1980
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1980,
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while
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 the
foot
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percentage
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 drops dramatically from 33
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percent
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 roughly to 25 %.
Thereafter
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, the fall
of
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in
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 the
percentage
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 of
the
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apply
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bike
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 usage was more significant than the
foot
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 usage
,
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;
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 it
fall
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fell
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 sharply of 15% approximately
while
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 the
foot
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percentage
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usage
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decreases
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decreased
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for
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by
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 just 5% roughly.
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, the car
use
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apply
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became the most used transport
in
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at
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 the end of the period
while
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 the bus
finally
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 remains globally at the same point.
In contrast
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,
bike
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 and
foot
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usages
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usage
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 decrease tremendously over the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, percent, bike, foot with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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