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Band 4

Some people think that universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education
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 plays an important role
for
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in
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 the
overall
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 development of human beings. Some dissenting voices believe that Institutions should consider equal numbers of male and female students for every
course
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.
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, I totally agree with
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view point
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viewpoint
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 because it provides equal
stands
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opportunities
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 for
education
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as well as
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foster
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fosters
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the
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apply
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carrier
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career
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 for
both
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 of them.
Therefore
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,
this
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 essay will shed light on my
stands points
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standpoints
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 with reason and
example
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examples
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.
To begin
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 with, universities should allocate
equal
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an equal
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 number of
seat
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seats
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 for
both
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 male and female so that there will be no discrimination regarding
to
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apply
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the
course
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 that
student
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students
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 like to opt
.
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for.
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 In yesteryears, females
where
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were
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 not allowed to study science because of
stigma in the
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the stigma in
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 society that females are not better
in
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at
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 solving problems, and the best example was
Dr.
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Dr
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 Marie Curie, who was refused by the institution for not
allowing
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being
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 her to
enroll
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enrol
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 in
science
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a science
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course
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.
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, Colleges should
encourge
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encourage
 equal seats for
both
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female
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females
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as well as
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male
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males
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.
Moreover
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,
education
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 helps to build cognitive ability to think, and solve
problem
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problems
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into
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in
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this
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 modern world, which
is
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are
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 essential skills for leading a moral
,
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apply
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 and
harmony in
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harmonious
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the
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apply
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society.
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, giving
importants
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importance
 to
both
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 men and women in terms of
education
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 would be a great
assest
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asset
 for the nation.
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, living standards are skyrocketing day by day
due
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to
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so
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this
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apply
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both
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female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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 are entering
into
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apply
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the workforce in order to maintain
the
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apply
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sustainability. So, by providing equal numbers of seats by universities for every subject can
aids
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aid
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 them in excelling
the
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in the
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 job market
as well as
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 climb the ladder of cooperate
carrier
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career
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.
For example
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, Women, nowadays, are leading most of the project management
task
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tasks
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 and leadership
funnels
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functions
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 in the top firms, and
this
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have
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has
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 been made possible
due to
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 the availability of
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course
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courses
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 that
has
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have
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 been opened to female and male
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apply
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both
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.
Consequently
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,
Insitution
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Institution
 indirectly helps them to excel in their
carrier
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career
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.
To conclude
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, In University, every
subjects
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subject
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have
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has
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equal
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an equal
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 number of female and male
canditates
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candidates
.
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, the claim against it is conspicuous because of the interest lies among the individuals for choosing the subject
their
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themselves
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 own and
this
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 leads to
lose
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loss
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 of the institution
due to
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vaccant
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vacant
 seats.
Nonetheless
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, I still stand firm by my
stand points
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standpoints
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 because it will
affect
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have
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a positively
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positively
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positive
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 for
both
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male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in terms of equality in
education
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 and open doors for job opportunities. It is crucial that universities should encourage the
canditates
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candidates
 about the
importants
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importance
 of
education
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 regardless of gender.

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structure
Split ideas clearly. One idea per paragraph, with a clear link to the next idea.
task
Say your view at the start and keep it to the end. Do not shift the idea too much.
grammar
Fix grammar and spell common words. Use simple, plain sentence.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show order and balance, like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'for example'.
content
Give real proof for each point and explain how it helps your view.
content
The writer shows a strong view on the topic.
content
The essay uses examples to back some points.
coherence
Some linking words are used to join ideas.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • inclusive environment
  • natural disparities
  • enforcing equal numbers
  • merit-based admission
  • qualified candidates
  • gender quotas
  • undermine
  • academic standards
  • guidance and support
  • societal biases
  • numeric equality
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