You have recently got e-mail from library. You write friend who is also go to the library. You write friend your suggestions.

Hi Monica, Hope youʼre doing well. I have received
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an email from the library, and it made me really happy. They asked about my opinion. Iʼm planning
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that should add more subject books for pupils. Iʼd
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be great if they
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a different interesting competition for older students. What do you think? Lots of love, July

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grammar
Fix the tight phrase in the first line. For example: 'I received an email from the library' is clearer than 'I have received from an email from the library.'
grammar
Use 'I would like them to' or 'I would suggest that they' instead of 'Iʼm planning suggest to that should' to show you want to share an idea.
lexical
Choose simple, clear words. Some ideas may be unclear, like 'subject books'—try 'books on different school subjects' or 'more books about school subjects'.
content
Give a tiny example of a book or a plan, so the reader can see your idea better.
coherence
Keep a friendly tone and link ideas with small joins like 'also', 'and'.
tone
Warm and friendly tone, good choice of opening and close
content
Two clear ideas are given, which fits the task
style
Short and easy to read for a friend
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