the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in canada in 2005 and 2010

The two pie charts provide information about sales for retail in online stores in different directions in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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it is clear that
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food and beverages have become the best-selling direction. Generally, almost every sector had a lower percentage later , except
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food and beverage sales Looking at pie charts , in 2005 the electronics and appliance industry had 35% sales,
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in 2010 it was 30% which means 5% less than in 2005. Food and Beverage had the most increase, in 2005 it was 22% but
then
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it increased to 32% and it was the best-selling choice. Looking at the details, the home furnishings industry there was 25%,
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it decreased by 10% in 2010. The video games sector had 18% and later in 2010 it went up to 23% which means it was the lowest
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in every industry

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail sectors
  • online shopping sales
  • significant growth/decline
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • sales percentages
  • emerged
  • evolution
  • notable
  • constancies
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