the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in canada in 2005 and 2010

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The two pie charts provide information about sales for retail in online stores in different directions in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
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it is clear that
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food and beverages have become the best-selling direction. Generally, almost every sector had a lower percentage later , except
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food and beverage sales Looking at pie charts , in 2005 the electronics and appliance industry had 35% sales,
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in 2010 it was 30% which means 5% less than in 2005. Food and Beverage had the most increase, in 2005 it was 22% but
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it increased to 32% and it was the best-selling choice. Looking at the details, the home furnishings industry there was 25%,
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it decreased by 10% in 2010. The video games sector had 18% and later in 2010 it went up to 23% which means it was the lowest
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in every industry

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail sectors
  • online shopping sales
  • significant growth/decline
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • sales percentages
  • emerged
  • evolution
  • notable
  • constancies
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