The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie
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illustrates the distribution of
dance
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classes in four locations, and the bar
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presents the number of
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in three types of two age
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group
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groups
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of
dance
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classes in a town in Australia who are currently attending.
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,
it is clear that
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private studios are
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first
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choice for most
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classses'
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classes'
location. Meanwhile, Ballet is the most popular
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.
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the pie
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,
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percentage of private studios
rank
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ranks
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first
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at 48%, followed by school halls and community halls and others (24% and 18% respectively). College-based studios occupy
smallest
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the smallest
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in
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proportion of
location
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locations
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at 10%. In the bar
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, the
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classes are
separate
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2
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into 2
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group
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by age. In
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the under
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11
group
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, most
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choose to study ballet,
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which
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reach
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reaches
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at
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approximately 600, followed by tap and modern at around 450 and 300
respectively
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, respectively
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. In comparison with another
group
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which
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, which
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it
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apply
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is
students
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age
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11 to 16, the figures
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for
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ballet
only
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are only
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half of
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first
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the first
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group
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at 300.
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, the
students
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of tap have similar figures
with
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to
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first
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the first
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group
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at roughly 420.
In addition
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,
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number of modern
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students
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higher
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is higher
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than
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first
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the first
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group
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and
reaching
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reaches
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520.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, dance, students, group, first with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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