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The table below gives information about rail transport in four contries in 2007.

The table chart provides data regarding the transportation of rail in four different nations in the year 2007.
Overall
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, we can see that China had the highest
number
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 of passengers,
while
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Canada
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 had the lowest
number
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;
however
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, they had the
foremost
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highest
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 percentage of carried cargo.
According to
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 the information shown, Malaysia showed a 5.9
percentage
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per cent
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, which
was illustrating
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 the
number
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 of people who used the rail transport without including the metro. As for
Canada
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, they had 0.3, and China and the UAE had 27 and 5.5, respectively.
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, the Emiratis
that
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 rode the railway were 780; the
number
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 decreased by 10 for Malaysians and even more for Canadians, which was 80. As for the amount of cargo transferred,
Canada
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 had a
number
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 that was near 30, which was 28.20
,
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;
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 the UAE and Malaysia shared the same proportion, which was almost 23
, as
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. As
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 for
Canada
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,
it is clear that
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 they transported 23.01.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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