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Band 3

There are many benefits to a good eduction. Therefore, a university education should be offered to all students, not just students with good high school grades. Do you agree or disagree?

A lot of advantages come from a good educational
systems
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.Every human being should have an equal opportunity to experience a good learning process.I strongly agree with
this
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 statement. First , Education is essential in
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and
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everyone
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life
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.Having a good learning environment will
effect
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you
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life
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 in every aspect.There are a lot of benefits of a good educational system.
First,
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experiencing a better education will develop every individual in
there
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 community.
Second,
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Having
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 good teachers will help each student in the classroom. Creating a good environment for teaching will
increase
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 the higher scores in each learning material. Second,
Receiving
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 an education has a significant impact not only on our quality of
life
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 but on our physical and psychological
wellbeing
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.
However
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,
In
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 a good educational
context
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 you will notice developing cognitive and communication skills
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 will help
on
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 learning how to communicate with others is a highly valuable skill in the job market.
Also
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,
Being
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 in a healthy classroom will help you find your passion in
life
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and
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 maybe choosing your dream job
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this
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 will create a future vision of your career.
To sum up
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There
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 are
uncountable
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countless
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 advantages of having a good educational system . Fostering economic growth and personal stability are two major benefits .Each and every society should focus on providing a whole excellent
educationl
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educational
 system to their citizens because it is the key to each successful community to invest in
there
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 learners.

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task response
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro that states your view, then give two or three clear reasons with simple examples.
coherence
Make the ideas flow. Use linking words like first, next, also, and finally to show how ideas fit.
grammar
Check your grammar. Use correct verb form and punctuation. Avoid long, run-on sentences.
content
You state a clear view on equal access to education.
content
You describe several good points on how education can help life and work.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equal opportunity
  • holistic development
  • traditional academics
  • nurture and enhance
  • broader talent pool
  • tapping into talents
  • aptitudes
  • socio-economic disparities
  • lifelong learning
  • adapting to changing job markets
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