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Some people use the Internet to search for solutions to their medical problems. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples from your experience

A lot of individuals rely to use the internet to find solutions for
thier
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their
 medical problems recently .
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 the
world wide web
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 has two side
effect
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in
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humen
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human
 life .
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,
i
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stongly
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strongly
 attend to be with the understanding
was
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people have
with
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 technology .
This
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assay
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 will discuss my view in more
details
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.
on
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 one hand , the internet has caused a
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major
 change in the information and knowledge .
For
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easyly
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easy
to
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for
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pataints
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patients
ask
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to ask
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 about
thier
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their
 problems and find
nemerous
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numerous
 medical care .
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 ,
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their
 is
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offecial
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official
 medical website
wich
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name
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 Myo
spreads
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and spreads
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 the real
imformations relaited
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information related
 to health care .
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 , Doctors have
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channels
 to share
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contents
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in
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the
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social media in the right way .
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 the cost will be
inferior
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lower
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 than
to
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going to the private clinic .
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structure
Work on how you link ideas. Use a plan: say your view, then give one reason, then give an example, and end with a short closing line.
language
Fix big spelling and grammar. Use simple words that you know. Check words like internet, medical, and website.
structure
Add a final paragraph that clearly states your view.
content
You have a real idea that the net can help with medical info.
content
You give the idea of real sites that can give true health info.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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