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The overuse of natural resources cause an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of this resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

There is a growing debate on whether the government should restrict the consumption of natural resources by people for non-essential purposes,
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 as modern-designed furniture. In my view,
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 benefiting from nature is understandable, a balanced governmental guarding is preferable. Forests are precious ecosystems that provide various organisms with habitats. Disturbing these areas by cutting down trees is problematic for both men and animals, as it negatively impacts the biodiversity and reduces the number of species, resulting in imbalanced food chains.
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, big forests
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 as the Amazon release about 20% of oxygen, which helps maintain
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global health. Governmental actions are required to regulate the usage.
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, the regulations and laws should not fully prevent people from
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 the resources, as extensive protection limits the freedom of choice and influences the industry.
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, raising awareness and encouraging eco-friendly substitutions is a better approach to conserve them for a longer time.
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 opinions differ, I believe that the usage of limited natural resources should be partially controlled to avoid environmental issues and to
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 advantages.

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task
Be clear about your main view from the start and keep it through the essay.
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Add 1-2 specific examples or facts to back up claims, and check facts that may be debated (like the oxygen from the Amazon).
coherence
Use simple links to show the flow of ideas; each paragraph has one main idea.
grammar
Avoid odd phrases and choose plain words; some sentences are awkward.
stance
The essay shows a clear stance that some limits on use are good.
structure
Good use of connect words (However, Instead, To conclude) to show links.
content
The topic of nature and policy is treated with care.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resources - things we use to live, such as water, wood, metal
  • environment - air, water, land that surround us
  • government - the group of people who lead a country
  • discourage - to make people less willing to do something
  • overuse - use too much
  • waste - use badly or too much, then throw away
  • design - plan how something will look and work
  • furniture - movable objects like chairs, tables for a home
  • harm - bad effect on something
  • policy - a plan or rule made by government
  • law - rule made by government
  • tax - money charged by government on goods or actions
  • ban - to stop something by law
  • recycle - to use again materials after use
  • reuse - use again
  • sustainable - able to keep going for long time without harm
  • pollution - dirty air, water, or land
  • climate - weather pattern over time
  • habitat - the place where animals live
  • industry - business in a field like wood, metal
  • economy - how a country makes and spends money
  • consumer - a person who buys goods
  • business - company that makes or sells goods
  • education - learning about a topic
  • awareness - knowledge about a topic
  • standard - a level that is set for quality
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