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Band 4

As the internet becomes more popular,newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extentdo you agree or disagree with this statement?

Because of the high speed of development of
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 are disappearing is becoming louder nowadays.As for me,
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 own advantages. For the better aspects of the
internet
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,there are two main
factiors
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factors
.The first one is more fantastic efficiency
on
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news
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.With millions of entrances being
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held
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new
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quite
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writing
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popularity
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population
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information
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millions
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countless
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 platforms that contain all kinds of
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 or have different functions,there are plenty of professional
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much better than
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newspapers
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believable
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calm when reading them,which
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.But these are not the
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 factors -carefully checked
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reading -feeling.In my opinion,they would stay at the same time ,waiting for the
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structure
Plan your answer before you write. Start with a short intro, then two clear body parts, and finish with a short conclusion.
coherence
Make ideas flow. Use simple linking words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example' to show how ideas fit.
language
Check grammar and word form. Watch for plural 'news', 'information', and for verb forms.
content
Give clear examples. Do not mix up facts or spell names correctly.
planning
Keep to the topic. Do not add many extra ideas that do not relate to the main question.
idea
The writer shows some good effort to compare internet and newspapers.
stance
The essay gives a clear view that newspapers may not vanish, not just say they will die.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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