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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Say how important New Year is to people in your country Describe how New Year is celebrated in your country Explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

Dear Ms Ngoc, I hope you are doing well
,
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.
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 I'm fine. I am writing to share about celebrating New
Yearyear
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Year's
in
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Day in
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 my country. The new
year
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 plays a pivotal role in
people
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's lives
,
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 it is
traditionaltraditonal
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a traditional
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 day in my country. It is organised in the spring. New
Year
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's is are special day, maybe
new
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the new
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year
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 is a time
,
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 when everyone reunites with their family. Many
people
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 who live far away are returning hometown. I feel it means a time. The new
year
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 is often organised from the 1st to the 5th
in
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of
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 January.
People
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 usually make Vietnamese sticky rice cake together before the 1st. The 1st
people
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 will go to
in
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another house to wish someone good health, lucky work and happiness. I like
New
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the New
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Year
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 in my country, it is a great way to relax and full of beans.
Besides
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 that, it can serve as an efficient way to strengthen relationships. Can you know others? Please reply to me. Wish best wishes. van anh

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structure
The letter should have clear paragraphs, each one about one idea: why New Year matters, how it is celebrated, and what you like. Right now many ideas mix in one paragraph.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, then. Use a clear opening and a closing line.
grammar
Check grammar and keep to simple words. Use one idea per sentence and one idea per paragraph.
content
Share specific details from your country that show how New Year is special.
content
Friendly tone and purpose is clear to a friend.
content
Includes cultural hints about New Year in your country.
tone
Warm closing wish.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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