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Percentage of children with different educational problems in two primary schools.

The given table compares different educational
problems
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 in two primary schools with
percentage
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the percentage
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 of children.
Overall
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, in both years,
School
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 A had a higher number of students with
problems
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.
While
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school
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 A reduced the number of students with
problems
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, at
school
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B
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 the number of students with
problems
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 continued
grow
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to grow
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. The table shows, in 2005, the biggest problem in
School
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 A was that pupils did not
followed
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follow
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 instructions, with 42%,
while
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 in
School
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B
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 it was one of the smallest
problems
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, only 6%. There were the
least
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fewest
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problems
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 with reading ability at
School
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 A, with just 22%, but youngsters from
academy
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Academy
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B
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 had fewer complications, with only 8%. In 2015, the difference between the two schools was less visible. Concentration and following the lesson were the only two areas with low figures in A, with 18%,
whereas
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 in college
B
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, there were reading and handwriting, with 7% and 9%.
Yougsters
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Youthsters
 from department A and
B
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 could not solve the
problems
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 with handwriting, numbers did not change during 10 years, they remained 28% and 7%.

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planning
Plan your essay. Use a clear start, body and end.
content
Make one clear over view at the start. Sum up the main points at the end.
grammar
Write in small, easy words. Check errors in tense and subject form.
numbers
Be exact with numbers. Keep the same style for all numbers.
cohesion
Use linking words to join ideas, simple ones like and, but, then, also.
content
There is an opening line that gives the general idea.
data
The essay uses data from the table to back points.
structure
Two time points are shown: 2005 and 2015.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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