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Percentage of children with different educational problems in two primary schools.

Proportion of children with various educational problems in two private schools between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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two
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the two
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 primary schools had 7 problem areas.
While
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 handwriting did not face any changes in a decade, the following instructions showed rare changes in percentages.
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 with, the following instructions fluctuated and displayed various rates in both years. In 2005, academy A was 42% but in 2015, it was 18%, which shows an incredible decline. The second department presents 6% and increased to 12% after 10 years. In 2005, Academy A was 40% which was one of the highest levels of the whole problem areas. Listening skills displayed in School A had a 35% and after ten years, it declined to 20%,
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 college B was 11%.
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, department A presents 30% in 2005 and in 2015 it decreased to 5%, and the second college shows 5%, which rose to 10% in 2015. Verbal expression of ideas illustrates the same result , which was in listening skills 35% in Hall A and Educational Centre B was 21%.

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structure
Use a clear overview that shows the main change for 2005 and 2015.
structure
Put data in order by year and by school, and use a new paragraph for each year or for each school.
language
Use simple link words to show change, such as 'rose', 'fell', 'stayed the same'.
accuracy
Be exact with the names of the schools and stay the same in all notes.
coherence
Keep one idea in each paragraph and connect ideas with smooth flow.
data
The writer uses data from the chart.
content
The writer tries to compare the two schools.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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