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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table chart provides certain specifications about
metro
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 transport in six big cities around the world.
Overall
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, New York
City
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Subway
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 has the highest number and the longest total length of its
metro
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lines
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 in comparison to
other
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the other
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 five cities. Beijing
Subway
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 makes 3.6 billion
travels
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trips
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 in a year, which makes it the most travelled-by
metro
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 in the group.
London
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 Tube has the priciest tickets,
while
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 Mexico
City
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 charges the least for a single trip.
Subway
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 in New York
City
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 has 24
lines
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, which is more than twice as
much
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lines
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 that are in the
London
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 Tube.
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, NYC
Subway
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's
lines
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 combined make up its total length of 659 miles,
while
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 Paris
Metro
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 has more than 500 miles less, making its
metro
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 system the shortest one. Beijing and Tokyo do not differ much in the view of annual journeys taken by
metro
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, only by 0.5 billion trips. The biggest difference here can be seen between Beijing and
London
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 - Beijing
Subway
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 annually makes triple the amount
od
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of
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 trips than
London
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.
Finally
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, the
London
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 Tube falls short in certain aspects
like
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number
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the number
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 of
lines
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 and annual trips made, but it still has the priciest ticket: 7.30 dollars. Mexico
City
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Metro
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 provides the cheapest ticket, even less than a dollar: only 23 cents.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words metro, city, subway, lines, london with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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