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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

The street where you live is in poor condition. Write a letter to local City Council in your letter you Explain the situation Explain the likely consequence Describe the change you expect to occur

Dear sir I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction towards the bad condition of street no 62 , which is located at 42 Avenue in Beaumont.
Due to
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 snowy days ,the whole street has been covered by five to six inches of snow since
last
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 week. Because of
this
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 , a Plethora of bumps are seen on roads , which ultimately creates a problem in driving.
Moreover
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 , sidewalks are fully covered by the snow. Nowadays, it has become very dangerous for locals to walk and drive.The black ice has formed everywhere because the temperature has risen since
last
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 week. So now it is more dangerous for people to come outside. I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could arrange a team to remove
this
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 snow as soon as possible.
In addition
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 to
this
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 , you could sprinkle an anti-slip salt to avoid injuries Thank you in advance for considering my complaint , and I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours sincerely Harman

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structure
Split the letter into clear paragraphs: intro, problem, how it can hurt, and the ask.
grammar
Use short, plain sentences. Try to keep one idea per sentence.
style
Fix spaces around punctuation and capital letters. Street and Avenue should be capitalized.
vocabulary
Use simple words instead of big ones like 'plethora' (try 'many' or 'a lot').
task
Be specific about what you want and when you want it.
tone
Keep a polite and formal tone throughout the letter.
greeting
The letter has a polite greeting and close.
content
It states the danger and the need for action.
content
It uses a clear request for the action of snow removal and salt.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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