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Writing Samples
Band 7

You have a friend who lives abroad. You have decided to apply for a course at one of the colleges in his city. Write to your friend explaining Tell them about the college and the course and why you want to do it. Ask for their help to find accommodation if you get admission to the course.

Dear Raman I hope you and your family are doing splendidly. You will be glad to hear that I have decided to take admission in a well-recognised London university. Since childhood, I have had a dream to study there. Aforementioned, the university is very famous all over the world. As you know , I did a bachelor's in mathematics,
now
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and now
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 I want to pursue the same subject in post-graduate studies.
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, my teacher suggested I continue my studies there, because the Department of Mathematics has good teachers, and they use a practical approach every time. I applied for the May intake . So, probably I will come to London
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 of May . As you know , except for you , no friend or relative of mine is from London . So, I need your help in finding an accommodation. I would appreciate it if you could find a place near my university which will give easy access. Thank you in advance for your help ,and I look forward to seeing you soon. Yours lovingly Abc

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structure
Put each main idea in a new short paragraph.
content
Name the course and explain why you pick it, with simple points.
language
Use small, easy words and fix tricky phrases like 'Aforementioned' or 'take admission'.
task
Be clear about when you will come and what you ask for (help with housing).
tone
Keep a gentle, polite tone when asking for help.
tone
Polite and warm tone to a friend.
content
Clear aim and request for help.
structure
Greeting and closing fit well with the letter.
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