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Band 4

Some people believe that students should be allowed to evaluate their teachers, while others think this could lead to a loss of respect and authority. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

"There is no denying the fact that evaluating
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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 could lead to
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 and a loss of control, there is
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 an argument that it could provide valuable feedback for
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.
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion On one hand, rating
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teaching
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 sharing their difficulties.
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, educators can understand the
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 points and try to enhance
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 classes.
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,allowing student
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express their views contributes to the development of teaching
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for
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 example,
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on
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 of maintaining academic standards . It is
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 possible to say that
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 will give the
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 easy tests and stop giving them
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 to avoid negative remarks .
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moreover
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, the
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 may
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be biased
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 by emotions or personal feelings rather than the teacher's performance
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students
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 on their marks
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 its high or low
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 conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question.On balance,
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,I tend to believe that
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to
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evaluate
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points
but
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same
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 time it can be unfair for
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the
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 if it is based on emotions
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 teaching performance

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structure
The essay has a good idea but more clear plan is needed in the intro and a stronger link between paragraphs.
grammar
Fix basic grammar and spelling errors so the reader can see your point better.
examples
Use one clear example for each main point to show how it helps.
style
Keep to simple words and short sentences to be easy to read.
content
The essay shows a fair effort to discuss both views.
position
The writer states an opinion, which keeps the task clear.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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