Nowadays, a growing number of peoples with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Many people these days start home remedies and physical exercise to treat themself.
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is a positive development because it saves money and, in some cases, proves to be a more effective treatment in disease management. On the one hand, using medications and following treatments without consulting a doctor can worsen health conditions. A doctor has knowledge about the body's reaction to drugs and the need for specific treatment. Because disease management has to follow a certain time period
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the severity of illness, if
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is not followed can adversely affect the other body parts.
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, one of my friends started taking medications to treat a fever, but those medications compromised his blood pressure.
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, using an alternative to medication and treatment , which sometimes saves money , without taking drug substances not good for the immune system. Like, herbal medicines do not produce any side effects and eliminate the root cause of illness.
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, sometimes it is possible to treat any medical condition without taking medication.
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, muscle spasm, bone dislocation, and minor spinal injuries can only be treated with physical activities and body massage.
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it can be dangerous to use medicines without consulting a family doctor, most of the time it saves patients money and helps to cure illnesses which cannot be treated with drugs.

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