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The table provides data on the year of opening, route length, and annual passenger numbers (in millions) for underground railway systems in six major cities.

The table illustrates data on the
year
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 of beginning, route length, and yearly passenger figures (in millions) for
underground
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the underground
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railway
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system
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systems
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 in six major cities.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Tokyo shows the most significant
usages
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usage
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 of
railway
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passengers
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,
while
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 Kyoto and Los Angeles illustrate the
most
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apply
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lowest
usage
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 of
passengers
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 and Kilometres.
To begin
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 with, Tokyo shows the highest number of underground
railway
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passengers
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 who used 1927 million times per
year
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 since 1927.
Moreover
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, Paris illustrates the
second highest
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second-highest
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railway
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passengers
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 and
usage
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 shows 1191 million times within 199km since 1900.
In addition
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, London is equal to Paris’
railway
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half
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apply
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usages
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usage
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 at the table with
775milion
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775 million
 within 394km since 1863.
By contrast
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, Washington DC shows slightly higher
usage
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 of
railway
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passengers
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 by
144milion
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144 million
 within 126km since 1976 per
year
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.
Furthermore
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, Kyoto and Los Angeles show
the
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apply
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similar numbers
approximately
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, approximately
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 47million
usage
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 of
railway
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passengers
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 per
year
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 within about 20km since 20 century.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, railway, passengers, usage, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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