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The table provides data on the year of opening, route length, and annual passenger numbers (in millions) for underground railway systems in six major cities.

The table provides details about
underground
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the underground
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 railway system
6
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in 6
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different cities. The London tube
considered
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is considered
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as
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apply
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the oldest and longest.
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However
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However,
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 the highest number of
passengers
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in
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is in
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 Tokyo. Looking at the details related to
London
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London,
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 it was opened in 1863 and has 394 kilometres of
route
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,
although
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 the annual
nuder
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number
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 of
passengers
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 is around 775
millions
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million
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. Paris is
on
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in
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the
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apply
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second position with 199 km and was organised in 1900, with 1191 billion
passengers
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 per year.
Underground
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The underground
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 in Tokyo was opened in 1927,
155
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with 155
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route
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 length ,and the most crowded - 1927 billion citizens per year. Regarding Washington DC , it was opened in 1976 ,
approximately
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with approximately
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 126 km
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route
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of route
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 length and 144
m
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million
 annual
passengers
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. Kyoto
even
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, even
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 though it is
Japan
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in Japan
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, comparing
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comparing
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compared
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with
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to
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Tokyo
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Tokyo,
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 it is leg behind with only 45
m
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million
passengers
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 per year,
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route
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the route
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make
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makes
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 up 11 km and was opened in 1981.
Los
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The Los
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 Angeles railway system was opened
2001
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in 2001
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is
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and is
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 the newest one, 28 kilometres
and
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long and
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 serving 50 million
passengers
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, route with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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