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You rented a car from Car Rental Company. The air conditioner has stopped working. You phoned the company a week ago but it still has not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter – introduce yourself – explain the situation – say what action you would like the company to take

#car #company #air #conditioner #week #situation #action
Dear Manager, I am writing
this
 letter regarding a
car
, hired from your local company on 27th July. My name is Parm rented a blue
car
 for my business trips.
Car
 os of Toyata conmpany Model 2007.On the day of hiring, all functions were working fine.
However
, after a day, the AC stopped working and made a strange noise.
Thus
, it has become hard to drive without AC
due to
 extreme heat waves.
Although
 I complied immediately with your department customer, I have not received any response after two days.
Apart from
this
, I visited the office and gave a written complaint, but nobody responded.
This
 problem is a disappointing experience for me. I am requesting you to provide the new rental
car
 with a discount.
Otherwise
, I will file a complaint with the customer care authority. I am sending you the agreement details of the
car
 leasing. Regards, Parm
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task achievement
Include more specific details about your actions and the timeline to strengthen your case. For instance, mention the exact date when you called or visited the office.
coherence
Make sure the paragraphs each have a single clear idea. For example, separate the paragraph describing the issue from the one recounting your previous attempts to get it fixed.
task achievement
The letter gets straight to the point and introduces the issue and your history with the car rental clearly.
suitable writing tone
The use of a formal tone is appropriate for the context.
coherence
Clear opening and closing, making it easy for the reader to understand your main points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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