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Band 1

The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two images illustrate how the park changed in 46 years.
Overal
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Overall
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, we can assume
,
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apply
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 that the park
become
Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
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 bigger. The picture shows more paths,
what
Correct pronoun usage
which
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can mean
Wrong verb form
means
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 that there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 more ways where people can spend time in nature. The gate, which was years ago, had gone and let people enter without any issues. One of the changes
,
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apply
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 it's a picnic place. There were made tables with
sits
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seats
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,
that
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where
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 people can spend time
an
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and
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 have
barbeque
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barbecue
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, observing what is in the photo. There are
also
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 new sorts of trees. There is
also
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 a place for games for kids
and
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, and
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 we can see fewer
banches
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branches
 near the pond.
To conclude
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 the difference, we can say that in general, there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 more visitors in the park,
compering
Verb problem
compared
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 to the photo in 1980.

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structure
Use a clear plan for each paragraph: start with a general idea, then list 2-3 changes, then compare to the 1980 photo.
coherence
Link ideas with clear words like first, next, also, but, and in all.
content
Be precise about the main points: name 2-3 big changes and show how they differ from 1980.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling; use simple present for facts (the park becomes bigger, there are more paths).
vocabulary
Use simple, common words (top 100) and avoid hard or new words.
content
You show the idea of changes in the park and some show of comparison with the older photo.
structure
There is an attempt to connect changes with time and use a closing line.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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