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The table and graph below give information on internet searches in the US between 2004 and 2010.

The graph illustrates data on internet
searches
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 in different engines (Google, Yahoo, Microsoft, AOL, and Ask
Jeeves
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Jeeves
) over the period,
while
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 the table shows total numbers of
searches
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 in the US from 2004 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that, among the other
searches
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, Google was the dominant figure,
while
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 most other search engines experienced a decrease.
To begin
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 with, the total number of US
searches
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 started at 4.5 billion in November 2004, and
this
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 figure dramatically increased in September 2010. On November 4th, the percentage of
searches
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 on Google started at about 35%;
this
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 was followed by considerable growth to under 60% during the decade. When it comes to Yahoo,
this
Linking Words
 figure experienced a small decline from under 30% to 20% by the
last
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 month, September 2010. The percentage of
searches
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 on Microsoft and AOL remained stable at around 15% and 5% respectively,
whereas
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,
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 the percentage of
searches
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 on Microsoft slightly declined.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words searches with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • table
  • graph
  • searches
  • year
  • years
  • period
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • go up
  • fell
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • stay
  • stay the same
  • remain steady
  • level off
  • peak
  • high
  • low
  • total
  • number
  • data
  • trend
  • pattern
  • change
  • compare
  • contrast
  • show
  • indicate
  • suggest
  • reach
  • hit a peak
  • from
  • to
  • over
  • then
  • finally
  • more
  • less
  • year by year
  • across
  • through
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