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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to three museums in London in the period
,
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apply
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 2007
until
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to
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 2012 . In the beginning, the chart
discusse
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discusses
 the
amount
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number
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 of people going to three different
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museum
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museums
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 in London city which are: National Gallery,
Victoria
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the Victoria
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 and Albert
Museum
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 , British
Museum
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.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 does not exceed 20
in
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 the whole duration.
Also
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, it never goes below 5 as well.
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, in
2012
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2012,
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 the National Gallery
Museum
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has
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had
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 the highest
number
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 of people visiting a
museum
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 since 2007 .
However
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, the Victoria and
Alber
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Albert
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Museum
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has
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had
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 a low
number
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 of
visitors
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 in 2012 compared to 2007, 2008.
Furthermore
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, the duration between 2009
until
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and
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 2011
,
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apply
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has the lowest numbers of
visitors
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 in general to the three museums .
Then
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 ar 2012 numbers start to increase . To
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summarise
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,
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
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 was high in general
at
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in
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the
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apply
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2007
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2007,
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then
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drops
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dropped
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 till
2011
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2011,
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then
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 increased
at
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in
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 2012 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • go up
  • decrease
  • fall
  • drop
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • rise steadily
  • fall gradually
  • stay the same
  • stay steady
  • peak
  • highest
  • lowest
  • more
  • less
  • compared with
  • in
  • over
  • the
  • period
  • year
  • between
  • across
  • pattern
  • trend
  • difference
  • overall
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