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The graph below shows the number of tourist a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

This
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 graph illustrates the
number
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 of
travellers
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 in a particular Caribbean
island
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, comparing the figures over the given period from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 visiting a Caribbean
island
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 showed an
overall
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 upward trajectory. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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witnessed
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a
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apply
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larger
number
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 of
visitors
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 compared to
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships. Despite some fluctuations throughout the period. In terms of
visitors
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,
travellers
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 staying on the
island
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 remained unchanged from 0.75
million
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visitors
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 in 2010 to 2011 and continued to rise steadily to 1.5
million
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visitors
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 in 2013. Later,
travellers
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 living on the
island
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 remained stable from 2013 to 2015 and fell sharply to roughly 1.25
million
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tourists
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 in 2016. The figure rose and fell several times, ending approximately at 1.5
million
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tourists
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 by the end of the period.
By contrast
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,
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships rose significantly from 0.25
million
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 in 2010 to 0.5
million
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travellers
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 in 2011 and dropped steadily to the starting point of 0.25
million
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tourists
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 in 2012. Despite a gradual increase to roughly 2
million
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visitors
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 in 2017.
Furthermore
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, the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 rose steadily from 1
million
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 to 3.5
million
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 over time, despite some fluctuations before reaching its highest point.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, travellers, island, tourists, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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