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Writing Samples
Band 4

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps provide key information about the site of an airport in present and how it will look after redevelopment next year.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the plan became more developed and organised over time, with the addition of several modern facilities and a clearer layout.
According to
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 what is shown at the airport now, there are two
gates
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: arrivals and departure
gates
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. From the arrivals gate on the right
side
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, there is a leisure space.
At the end
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 of
this
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 section, there is passport control and customs. On the departure
gates
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, on the left
side
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, there is a cafe. On the right
side
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, there is a check-in corner. Next to
this
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, there is a security passport control department.
Also
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, there are two walkway stations with only 8
gates
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. In terms of after development, on the right
side
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, there will be a car hire on the corner, an ATM, and a cafe. From the departure
gates
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, the check-in was replaced by a bag drop. A new shop centre will be added in the end section. It is noticeable that it will be replaced by the sky train.
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, the
gates
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 will arrive at 18
gates
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.

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task management
Give a clear start with an overview of both maps. Then describe features in order, not mix past and future.
coherence
Make the compare clear by using words like 'while' or 'in the future' to show change.
grammar
Use short and simple sentences. Check for grammar and big links.
content
Add more exact details about key parts like gates, shops, train line, and the number of gates.
conclusion
End with a short line to sum up the changes.
content
The write shows both maps and the idea of change.
content
It mentions many parts such as gates, cafe, and shop.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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