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Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

There are some individuals who argue that authorities should allow artists to draw their
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 on walls,
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 others think
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 behaviour is wrong and should not be allowed. In
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 essay, I will explain both perspectives and include my opinion. On the one hand,
graffiti
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 is a form of
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; it represents local
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,
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 as their heritage and culture, which is
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 a powerful tool for
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 since sometimes it helps advocate their voice.
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 to that,
graffiti
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 turns
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 empty areas of the city into colourful, lively spaces.
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,
graffiti
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 can be used to promote tourism, which can lead to an increase in the revenues of
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country.
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, many think that
graffiti
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 should be banned since it has harmful effects.
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, property damage: some artists draw on buildings that belong to
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 who live there or work there;
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, these acts damage their property and may cost them lots of money since some paints are hard to remove.
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, in some countries,
graffiti
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 is associated with criminal activities, which leads to making
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 kind of
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 illegal and may result in heavy fines or
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punishment.
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,
graffiti
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 artists may destroy some historical pieces,
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, historical buildings and sculptures, to advertise
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their
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.
To conclude
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,
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 I do think that
graffiti
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 is a beautiful kind of
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 that represents cultures and inspires many, I do think it sometimes harms
people
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, and it should be practised when needed;
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, I believe that governments should start to fine
people
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 who do not follow the law.

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task
Be clear with your main idea in each paragraph and keep to the task
structure
Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that links to your idea
support
Give more strong examples to back what you say
language
Check wording and fix small grammar mistakes
cohesion
Use simple linking words to show how ideas go together
conclusion
Finish with a strong line that sums up your view
content
The essay shows a view on the topic and has a clear opinion
structure
The use of On the one hand and On the other hand helps structure
overall
It opens and ends with a clear frame
content
Some good ideas on art and life in a city are in the essay
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban art
  • vandalism
  • vibrancy
  • aesthetic
  • decline
  • creative expression
  • cultural asset
  • legal ramifications
  • marginalized groups
  • community engagement
  • ethical considerations
  • gentrification
  • zoning regulations
  • public space
  • civic responsibility
  • curated walls
  • street artists
  • social commentary
  • property rights
  • anti-graffiti coatings
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