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Band 4

Online education is better than traditional classroom learning.

Nowadays,
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education
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 plays a significant
rolr
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role
 in
sociteys
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societies
. Many
people
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 think
the
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online
education
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is make
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makes
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biger develpment
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bigger development
 than traditional
education
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.
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study
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studying
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 by
useing
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using
 technology
it
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is the most
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 we should
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 currently.
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study
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studying
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make
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makes
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students
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 more
attintion
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attentive
 and
comfertable
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comfortable
 because
,
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 it is easy to use and
do
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 not require
alot
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a lot
 of
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requirements
so
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 it
is save
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 time and money
even
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 for the
governament
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government
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therefor
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, we will see a big change in
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education
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, if
student
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a student
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 uses the internet to find a few
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such
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,
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 to complete
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an assighnment
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assighnment
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assignment
 or attend class, he will find it
esasire
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easier
 and faster without making an effort.
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 addition,
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study
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 online has
plantey
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plenty
 of
advantegs
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advantages
 like talking,
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chatting
,
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 with teachers and
classmeats
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classmates
on
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 an online meeting,
also
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 the teacher can write on
his
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 advice so all
students
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 can see and
lisent
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listen
 to
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their
 teacher. In instance, there are many
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special
app
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apps
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 for
studeing
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studying
 like
meet
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,
classroom
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 and chat.
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,
this
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education
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educational
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environmenate
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environment
benefintly
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beneficial
.
socendly
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Secondly
, account
students
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 who
depindes
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depend
 on the technology for
studing
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studying
is
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 more than
thoses
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those
prefer
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atraditional
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traditional
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people
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related
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being related
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on
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so
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 it becomes
anicessesery
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an necessity
 in our daily life as well
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exiests
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exists
 in many
fileds
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fields
. to be clear, our world trying to throwe any thing has conacting with traditinal where as, place his concernet on the technology
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in
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 conclusion,
the
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online
education
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 is the best way to make progress
on
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 the
education
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 system, because of
it’s
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 easy and comfortable for
students
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 and our world
switching
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 any thing to
technonlogy
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technology
.
even
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 though there are
people
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study
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a
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worest invantion
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worst invention
 that
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humankind
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 has created,
on the other
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hand,
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 you will find out
there
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 is a great
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percentage
 of
people
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 who prefer that.

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structure
Plan your essay. Use four parts: intro, two body parts, and a short end.
grammar
Use simple and correct spell. Check words and fix common errors.
ideas
Give one or two real examples to back your main idea.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like also, but, and.
content
The clear view on online education shows what you think.
task response
There are some reasons given for the view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online
  • learning
  • study
  • class
  • classroom
  • student
  • teacher
  • school
  • home
  • time
  • place
  • money
  • cost
  • save
  • travel
  • easy
  • hard
  • good
  • bad
  • better
  • worse
  • idea
  • change
  • future
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