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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below illustrate the difference between
bookstore
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the bookstore
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 in 200 and nowadays.
Overall
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, we can say that in the past, there were a lot of
shelws
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shelves
 with the
fiction
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books
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compering
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compared
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 to our days. Today we can see that some
shelws
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shelves
 were removed and
books
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 about art, hobbies and cookery were replaced near the
fiction
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 department, and
thats
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that's
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 why there
is
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are
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 fewer
fiction
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books
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.
Instead
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 of non-
fiction
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, now we see a cafe and the non-
fiction
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 was moved to the corner of the store, which makes it now the biggest department
compering
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compared
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 to 2000 year
where
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when
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fiction
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 was the biggest. One more big change is
tables
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the tables
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. After removing the
shelws
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shelves
, there
were
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was
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 some free space, so now, we can see a few tables where people can read different kinds of literature before buying
them
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it
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. Some
departments
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departments,
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 like travel,
place
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a place
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 for new
books
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 and
service
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the service
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 desk, are still
on
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in
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 their old places.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fiction, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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