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The constitution of many countries states that people are the only source of power. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Have you participated in politics in any way?

It has been said that the source of capability in different countries comes from their population. Despite the truth of
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 statement, I do not completely agree, as the
Constitution
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 is not always followed in the way that it should.
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, my interest in politics is rather low
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, I have never participated in any way in the matter. The
Constitution
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, in fact, mentions that
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power comes from
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society if the government is ruled by democracy. As a matter of fact, many countries around the globe try to dictate and follow it as true.
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, the state feels part of the decisions that apply
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. By giving the power to
people
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people,
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 it makes it more likely that the community will cooperate more and follow whatever decision is made.
On the other hand
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, there are some countries where the
Constitution
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 is not followed
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 corruption among the leaders of the country. If
this
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 is the case, people's opinion is not even considered, which could lead to riots and/or conflicts in their daily
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lives.
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 As an example,
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the USA
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 president making decisions that are going against the existing
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, leaving
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the nation
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 with
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no
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 voice.
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, having a
Constitution
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 is irrelevant if the head of state does not listen
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country
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country's
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 needs.
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a
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conclusion, I do not agree that the
Constitution
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 gives power to
people
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the people
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 in every single case.
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 it was mentioned, ideally it would,
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but unfortunately
 it is not always the case. If I had better knowledge
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of
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 politics, I could have a more accurate opinion, but my lack of participation in politics limits me.

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grammar
Check grammar and word form errors; fix mistakes like 'listen the country needs' and 'If I had better knowledge in politics'.
lexical
Use simple but precise words; avoid awkward phrases and keep meaning clear.
stance
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structure
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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