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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.

The graphs demonstrate the countryside of Stokeford from 1930 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Stokeford was exposed to significant changes, with
number
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the number
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 of
houses
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 increased
especially
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, especially
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 along
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road
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the road
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,
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. In
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in addition
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, new shops were constructed near the post office on the west side of the village,
while
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 gardens were replaced
to
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with
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 retirement
houses
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 and
farmlads
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farmland
were
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was
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 eliminated given timeframe.
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 with,
amount
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the number
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 of
houses
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 increased and
located
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were located
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 near the
road
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;
nevertheless
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, farmland which was located to the east and the east side of the river stroke below deforested,
moreover
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, two shops were built next to the post office and
houses
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. In terms of
,
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apply
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 gardens and large
houses
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 replaced by retirement homes,
furthermore
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, several
houses
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raised
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were raised
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 and connected to the primary school,
whereas
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 a path was set up and connected to
main
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the main
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road
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 and encompassed newly erected
houses
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.
In
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On
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 the other hand, woods were eradicated and created
new
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a new
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 trail and linked to
main
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the main
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road
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,
also
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 covered
houses
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demolition
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • urbanization
  • land use
  • farmlands
  • notable buildings
  • layout
  • developments
  • economic growth
  • population growth
  • amenities
  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reconstruction
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