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Band 3.5

Plastic bags，plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

damage-
plastic
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 material will not disappear, it will exist forever on
earth
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Earth
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solution
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Solution
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- to reduce usage of
plastic
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, use disposable
table wear
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tableware
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such
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 as
straw
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a straw
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 or
spoon
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a spoon
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 In
this
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 modern world, the issue of
plastic
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 waste and its
environment
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environmental
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 impact has been a widely
issue
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the specific damage caused by
this
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 material,
then
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 explain the measures that can be taken by both governments and individuals to solve
this
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 problem. The primary damage caused by plastics is pollution to the ecosystem of
ocean
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the ocean
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. These days, the speed
of
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at
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 generating
plastic
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wastes
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waste
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is
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is generated is
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 increasing. Because of
huge
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the huge
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number
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amount
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 of
plastic
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 garbage should be tackled with insufficient energy.
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, burning is the best way to handle
the
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apply
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plastics
,
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;
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however
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, the existing fire power plants are not strong enough to handle them.
This
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 leads people to dump redundant
wastes
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waste
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to
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into
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 the oceans, which means it definitely kills our planet. To address
this
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 issue, governments can design a policy to reduce
usage
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the usage
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 of
plastic
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, which benefits both
environment
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the environment
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 and
general
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the general
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publics
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public
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. For a great instance, many countries restrict people
to use
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from using
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 the disposable tableware
which
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apply
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made with paper,
such
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 as straws, forks and spoons.
This
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 limitation works well as it strongly downsizes the
number
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use
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 of
using
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apply
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plastic
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 things. In conclusion, there is no doubt that
plastic
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is
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plays
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 a vital role in
contemporary
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the contemporary
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 generation, as everything is made with
this
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 element.
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, we must do something to protect our planet, as we only have one
earth
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Earth
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.

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structure
Plan your essay well. State the damage first, then what governments can do, then what people can do. Do not jump from one idea to another.
structure
Use one idea in each paragraph. Start with a clear topic sentence and end with a quick idea.
content
Give more facts or real examples to back the points. For instance, numbers of plastic in oceans or a real rule.
grammar
Fix grammar mistakes. Watch plural and verb forms, and use simple tense.
cohesion
Use linking words to show order and cause, like first, next, also, but, so.
task
Finish with a stronger conclusion that restates the main idea.
strength
You show a plan to talk about damage and steps to fix.
strength
There is an intro and a closing line.
strength
You try to use key words like 'problem' and 'solution'.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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