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Band 2.5

Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

I
belive
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believe
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 that
success
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 in life
come
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comes
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 from hard
work
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,
Consistant
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consistent
 planning and
resilant
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resilience
. When we perform our duty with proper Planning, positive results will
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be achive
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achive
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achieved
.
many
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Many
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 people who have
achived
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achieved
 their
success
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for
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, for
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example
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example,
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 Bill Gates, Elon
Muek
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Musk
, they don’t
belive
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believe
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 in pure luck. They have worked tirelessly to be who they are today. Musk started his
Paypal
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PayPal
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 business and later sold it and
invest
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invested
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on
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in
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 electric car manufacturing.
Mr.
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Mr
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 Gates was CEO of Microsoft. They didn’t
achived
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achieve
 their
success
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 overnight. Musk was working 80 hours per week, sleeping in his office. With proper communication, coordination among
team-member
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team members
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, showing leadership skills and executing those plans and monitoring
it
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them
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 can lead to
success
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.
Secondly
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, when we monitor our progress, receive feedback and
impliment
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implement
those
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that
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 feedback to make of required changes. These are the skills that every successful individual
posess
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possesses
. They
work
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 on their SWOT analysis.
They when
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When
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 we know our
strength
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strengths
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,
weakness
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weaknesses
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,
opportunity
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opportunities
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 and threats.
To sum up
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, I
belive
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believe
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 in hard
work
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 where we execute our plan with appropriate
stratigies
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strategies
.
some time
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Sometimes
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 we can have positive results based on luck
but
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, but
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 getting
a
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apply
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consistant
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consistent
 results
required
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requires
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 hard
work
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, proper planning and strategy.

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language
Spelling and grammar need work. Use small, correct forms and punctuation consistently.
structure
Make a plan. Start with your view, then two main ideas, each with a small example, then a short ending.
development
Describe how each example shows your idea. Do not just name people. Tie back to your point.
coherence
Add linking words to show order and flow, such as first, also, then, finally.
content
Check facts in the examples. The facts should be true or clearly stated as what you think.
content
The view on success is easy to see.
content
The essay uses real life names to back up ideas.
structure
It says that work and plan can lead to good results.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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