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Band 3.5

The best way to solve the world‘s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The most effective method to overcome the
world
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's environmental
challenge
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 is to
escalate
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increase
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 the cost of
fuel
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.In my opinion,increasing the expenses of
fuel
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will
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expenses will
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 reduce the CO2
emission
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emissions
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,
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apply
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 and air pollution
resulting
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, resulting
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 in making the
world
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 a better place. To illustrate,
bounsing
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raising
 the
fuel
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 price will leave
people
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 with multiple
of
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apply
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solutions.
For instance
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,
people
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 will start using
hybird
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hybrid
 and
electrical
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electric
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cars
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which
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, which
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 are
enviromentaly
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environmentally
 friendly.
Electrical
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Electric
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cars
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 do not produce CO2 emissions or traffic noises that can harm
humans
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human
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 ears,
also
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 they need to be charged
once
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only once
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 a week
only
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apply
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.
Hybird
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Hybrid
cars
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 are in need of both
fuel
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 and
electrcity
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electricity
and
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, and
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 they are more
effciant
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efficient
 than
fuel
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cars
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.These initiatives will help individuals to save money and be more helpful
to
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in
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 future environmental change.
Moreover
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,some
citizanes
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citizens
 will start using other transportation systems like bicycles,metro,
electrical
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electric
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 buses,and some will start
walk
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walking
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.
This
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 approach will be both helpful for
people
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 and
government
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the government
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,it will help
people
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 to be
more
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apply
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healthier if they walk or use
biycycles
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bicycles
 and will develop
thier
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their
 stamina and strength.
Furthermore
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,the government income will rise from
citiznes
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citizens
that
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who
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 started using other mobility
such
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 as
metro
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the metro
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,
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apply
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and
electrical
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electric
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 buses.
On the other hand
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,
Increasing
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increasing
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 the
fuel
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 price will
affact
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affect
 the
world
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's economy and will be a specific reason
to
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for
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 inflation.
In addition
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,inflation will
rise
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raise
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 the cost of a lot of
product
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products
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and
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, and
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that is
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 because the logistics price will rise more and more. In conclusion,increasing the
fuel
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 prices will have a
segnificant
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significant
 impact on individuals and
government
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the government
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 but will have a negative
imapct
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impact
to
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on
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 the
world
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's economy.

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task
Be more clear on your view. Give more simple steps for how price rise will cut use. Add a plan that fits your idea.
coherence
Link ideas with small words. Use order words like First, Next, Then, Finally to join parts.
language
Fix spelling and form. Use short, clear words that you know well.
examples
Add one or two more real examples and say how they help the goal.
structure
Keep a strong and simple shape: intro, 2 or 3 body parts, and a short end.
strength
Clear view on the topic.
strength
Many ideas are given (cars, bikes, bus, metro).
strength
Mention of both good and bad sides.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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