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Writing Samples
Band 4

"Prevetion is better than cure" Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree?

It is often
argured
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argued
 that a cure
spend
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spends
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 a big amount of
expences
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expenses
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, but
measures
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 in advance would be better
due to
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 saving
money
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.
However
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,
i
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I
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 think that a treatment
can be not
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cannot be
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 too costly,
i
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I
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 agree that the best
desicion
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decision
to
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is to
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 contribute
in
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to
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 preventive
measures
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. Preventive
measures
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 use a low amount of
money
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 and
that
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which
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a
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is a
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clear advantage.
Firstly
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, when
people
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 take into account their
health
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 and take care of
well-being
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their well-being
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, they
immidiately
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immediately
low
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lower
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a
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the
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 risk of disease and serious consequences. Because,
before
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people
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 did not think about their
health
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 at all.
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, even
people
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 had know about their problems with
health
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, in most cases they just ignore the problem. Reasons
of
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for
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such
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as
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an
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 attitude in
lack
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a lack
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 of time and
money
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.
Secondly
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,if
audience
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the audience
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stop
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stops
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to spend
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spending
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 huge
money
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 on treatment, and
start
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starts
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invest
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investing
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 in prevention, high-probability that they will be
centenarian
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centenarians
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 in the future.
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, residents of
Japon
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Japan
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,
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apply
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 they always
invention
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inventive
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 in self-care from
young
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a young
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ages
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age
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, thanks
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this
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to this
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 species the most countries
admitts
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admit
japanese
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Japanese
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 residents as
centenerians
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centenarians
.
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, prevention can
faced
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face
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and
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apply
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negative sides. Nowadays are
people
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 who always make
check up
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check-ups
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 in hospitals
,
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apply
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called
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call
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this
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as
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apply
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a
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apply
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"
prevetive
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preventive
measures
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".
there
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 are no bad
respond
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responses
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 in time and care about
health
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.
Althought
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Although
,
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apply
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 there is no good in
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a check
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check up
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check-up
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 in
small
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a small
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 period of time.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, worries contribute to
anxious
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anxiety
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,
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apply
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 and trigger panic attacks,
that
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which
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 can ruin mental
health
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.
Consequantly
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Consequently
, abuse of constant
health
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 checks can
make
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have
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 a negative outcome. In conclusion,
althought
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although
 preventive
measures
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 can save our
health
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 and help
live
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us live
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long
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longer
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, society must not abuse of opportunity of
check up
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check-ups
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, and make screening less
in
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frequent in
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 one month.

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task response
Your view is not very clear. State your main view at the start and keep it clear in the end.
coherence
Make a simple plan with 3 main ideas. Use a clear topic sentence at the start of each paragraph.
coherence
Use easy link words like first, next, but, for example to help flow.
language
Fix spelling and grammar to make meaning clear.
task response
You try to compare prevention and cure and give ideas.
coherence
There is a conclusion that wraps up the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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