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Online education is becoming increasingly popular. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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 world,
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it is believed that getting an education
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distance
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 is becoming widespread around the globe. I strongly believe that online education is more likely to be detrimental
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. It is true that
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 ordinary people can
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have positive effect through distance learning. One of the main
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 might be that humans and students may save their time.
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, there are a lot of learners who spend two hours on
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 they can
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 time and spend it on other chores. Another
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 is that education would be more accessible for everyone. Another beneficial aspect is that they can have a great chance to learn at home. Keeping
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 people can have multiple benefits,
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, they can open a
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 and have
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lessons through numerous platforms or apps -
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Coursera
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khan academy
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Khan Academy
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- for free of charge and with
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instructors
, which means no need to pay for some of them and
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 easy to learn with AI. Despite the positive effects described above, I would argue that the potential negative effects
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 distance learning are significant in comparison. First and foremost, it can be
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an inefficient
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 study method. Every single
students
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student
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learners
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learner
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 should be under
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the control
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 of their teacher, but in
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 productive because they can use AI during the test period and
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cheat
 from apps or books that they have. Another main harmful effect might be a lot of disturbance during the class.
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: during study
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 students can be disturbed by receiving notifications, text messages and having background noises, which can lead to get minor outcome because they
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 focus.
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 the possible disadvantages
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of studying
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 online among juveniles or humans. I remain convinced that its
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 impact is negative for reasons mentioned above.

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structure
Make a short intro that states the topic and your view clearly.
organization
Use one main idea in each para, with a short example.
language
Check words and spell well. Use simple, common words.
conclusion
Finish with a strong end that restates your view.
content
The writer shows a view and tries to give both sides.
content
There are some real examples like travel time and online tools.
structure
The piece has a clear plan with intro, body, and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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