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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The tables shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table presents the annual police income during 2017 and 2018,
while
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 the charts report their expenditure in three different categories. In general, a considerable income was provided by
national
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the national
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 government,
whereas
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 the
two
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other two
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others
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apply
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contributed the least. In
term
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terms
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 of expense, most of their budget
allocated
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was allocated
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 for employee
fee
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fees
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,
although
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 it fell slightly in the following year.
According to
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 the table,
national
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the national
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 government allocated a substantial money for police in both years, accounting for 177.8 million euros. Local taxes ranked the second major source, increasing by
margin
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a margin
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 of 6 million
euro
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euros
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 in two years.
On the other hand
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, grants remained relatively stagnant, rising merely fractionally from 38 to 38.5 million euros. Moving onto the charts, in 2017, it can be observed that 75% of the police
budet
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budget
 was spent on salaries
,
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however
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,
this
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 share declined to 69% in the next year. Buildings and
transportion
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transportation
 were set to the same proportion at 17% in two years.
By contrast
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, the
techonology
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technology
 figure rose substantially by 2018,
which
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apply
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nearly doubling its initial share.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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