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some people think thtat goverment is wasting money on art. Do you agree or disagree ?

Art
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 has a pivotal role in society, from cave paintings to the digital
art
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 present today. For many years, opinions on how funding should be
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 have been divided. Some people believe that the government should spend money on more pressing issues,
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 others advocate for increased support for
art
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. In my opinion,
art
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 should receive significant support because it benefits society in many ways.
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, as a human race, we need to evolve, and
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 evolution is driven by our natural creative processes.
Art
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 fosters creativity, allowing us to think outside the box and develop new ideas.
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, we can confidently say that participation in the arts can inspire change in the world around us. Another point to consider is that there is no
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 without humans, and there
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 no humans without
art
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. As the only species known to create
art
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, life without it would be too dull and lacking in character. We need music, literature, films, and various forms of
art
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 that define our humanity.

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structure
Plan your essay with four parts: a short intro that states your view, two body parts with one main idea each, and a brief ending.
development
Give one real example or fact to back your reason. It can be a simple true event or program.
cohesion
Use linking words to join ideas. Words like also, but, and, for example help the flow.
accuracy
Check grammar and word choice. Use common, easy words.
content
You say your view clearly.
content
You give a reason why art matters.
cohesion
You keep the topic in hand most of the time.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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