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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

In many countries today, everyday necessities like food and petrol have become very expensive. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Basic necessities
plays
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play
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 a crucial role in a growing number of people
from
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 many years.
Overall
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, every individual is facing a significant increase in many things in daily life
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such
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, such
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 as food
or
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and
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 petrol
all
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, all
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 over the world. There are many reasons behind the rise of basic requirements. In my opinion, several steps can be taken
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such
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 as collaboration can be done with foreign countries.
Additionally
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, people can save their limited resources.
Firstly
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, all politicians should maintain
a
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apply
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strong communication and understanding with other countries,which is mainly required for
exchange
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the exchange
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 of essential products.
As a result
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, any
country
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 lacking in any sector
they
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apply
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can get maximum resources whenever required.
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,
india
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India
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 always take oil from
dubai
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Dubai
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 mutually.
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, a good relationship is
must
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a must
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.
Secondly
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,
It
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it
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 is every
person
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person's
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 responsibility of their own
country
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 to
utilize
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utilise
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 resources as per their requirement
instead
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 of the maximum
utilization
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utilisation
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.
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, people can save their limited water without wasting it on several tasks.
This
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 can help
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country
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the country
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 in many
ways
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ways,
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like
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as
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 they
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do need
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need not
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not need
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 to borrow water from other countries,which may lead to
save
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 in income of
country
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.
As per
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 my opinion, survival is totally dependent on basic requirements
without
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; without
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them
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that
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that,
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 no one can survive. With good terms with any
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country
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country,
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 our own
country
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 can grow ,and can enjoy every facility without spending much on it.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 proper usage
shoulf
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should
 be done.

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planning
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro, then two clear body parts, and finish with a short end.
content
Give more strong reasons for each point. Add facts or data to back up your view, even simple numbers.
coherence
Link your ideas. Use connecting words to move from one idea to the next and to show how they relate.
content
There is a key idea about how other countries and saved water may help.
development
An example is given about other countries, showing some effort to explain.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic instability
  • market dynamics
  • inflationary pressures
  • consumer spending
  • trade barriers
  • supply chain bottlenecks
  • subsistence goods
  • monetary policy
  • fiscal measures
  • socioeconomic impact
  • cost-effective alternatives
  • energy conservation
  • sustainable practices
  • agricultural yield
  • commodity prices
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