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Political dynasty is a form of political strategy, especially in developing countries. What problems does political dynasty cause, and what solutions can you suggest for governments and businesses to take?

A widespread problem in developing countries is dignitaries originating from old, notable families ruling the government for decades.
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 brings many harmful consequences,
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 as the danger of dictatorship and
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, which slow down economic growth.
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 essay suggests solutions that governments and businesses can take. The first and most obvious solution is the prohibition of occupying more than one crucial role in each department by members of the same family.
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 innovation will help to get rid of the whole institution working for national interests rather than private ones.
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, it will cause a decrease in the level of
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 in each sector,
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corruption
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 between institutions may remain because they can still be ruled by relatives. The second solution is the implementation of an independent anti-
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bureau
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 that obeys foreign countries which do not have benefits in the country where the
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 is located.
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 innovation could cause a significant breakthrough in the war against
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 because
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 organ could not be bribed with money or other services and cannot be intimidated by force.
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, businesses have to stop encouraging
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. They must stop buying safety certificates and
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 paying taxes. In cases of external pressure from criminals or the government, they should seek help from the anti-
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bureau
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.
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 have negative effects. A country that hosts
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 may lose a degree of autonomy and face an increased risk of interference from other countries. At the same time, it may have the opposite impact on GDP, and a poor country may become even poorer. In conclusion,
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 the domination of government positions by members of influential families creates serious risks
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 and dictatorship, certain structural reforms can reduce these problems.
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 these measures may limit national autonomy to some extent, they can ultimately promote transparency, economic stability, and long-term development.

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task
Plan before you write. Put your main view in the first line, then list the problems and then the fixes.
task
Add more real ideas or facts to show why the fixes can work. Give small proof or detail.
coherence
Make each paragraph get one big idea. Begin with a topic sentence and use signals to link your ideas.
coherence
Use short and clear links like first, next, also, but, finally to help flow.
language
Use easy words from the common list and check your grammar and spelling.
content
Your essay shows a clear plan and a view on the issue.
structure
You use ordered steps with ‘first’ and ‘second’ which helps the reader follow.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • power
  • family
  • rule
  • government
  • country
  • problem
  • solution
  • plan
  • idea
  • people
  • leader
  • election
  • vote
  • law
  • fair
  • unfair
  • honest
  • open
  • money
  • time
  • work
  • job
  • business
  • change
  • trust
  • hope
  • school
  • help
  • risk
  • future
  • clear
  • record
  • data
  • truth
  • team
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