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Band 2.5

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

These two maps show us how a farm has changed its site between 1950 and today.
Overall
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, we can see that many things have changed in comparison with the past. More buildings have been built
and
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, and
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 others have changed their roles. In 1950, there was a zone for the
sheeps
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sheep
,
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this
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but this
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 is not the case today. Nowadays, it is a place with a camping field, some solar panels and two parkings, one in the camping and the other next to the panels.
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, the track is now a road. The zones with fruit trees, soft fruits, vegetables, chickens and the farmhouse are the same today as in 1950
,
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however
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, a farm shop is now present at the place with trees. Currently, a barn is just at the bottom of the road
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while
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, while
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 in the past,
this
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 was next to the track, near the
sheeps
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sheep
.
Finally
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, at that place, there are now some holiday cottages.

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task response
Improve task response by adding a clear overview in the first paragraph about the main changes and keep all points that are important.
coherence cohesion
Make the essay easier to follow by using a clear order: first past, then present, and finish with a short summary.
strength
There is an overall idea at the start about changes.
strength
The text mentions many parts of the farm and how they change.
strength
Simple linking words help join ideas.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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