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Band 2.5

As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling,there is a growing demand for more flight. What problems does this have on environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problem?

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Number
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The number
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 of travellers
significantly
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has significantly
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 increased over
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last
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the last
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 decades, leading to a growing demand for more flights.
This
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 issue can
determine
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cause
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 some problems related to the general environment. First of all, the
number
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 of travelling people is continuously growing,
due to
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 the fact that each one wants to move to visit different places, for both work and personal reasons.
Therefore
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, the
number
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 of tourists or workers needing a flight significantly increased over time, leading to a higher
number
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 of available
transports
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transport
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.
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 Anyway, during each flight, there is the release of a dangerous amount of particles. If the
number
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 of travels increases,
this
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 can
determine
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lead
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 a higher air pollution.
Therefore
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,
this
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 issue can involve each country around the World, and it could
be
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cause
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a
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apply
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serious damage
for
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to
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 our planet. In my opinion, air pollution is a serious and
wide
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widespread
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 problem, affecting
each
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every
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 country and every single person should be adequately informed. Each Nation should regulate the
number
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 of flights
and
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, and
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,
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apply
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 rules are needed.
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, some companies adopted new systems, determining low CO2 release during the travel, leading to a more "sustainable" flight. Each citizen should be
sensibilised
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sensitised
,
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apply
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 in order to avoid flights that are not sustainable. It can be concluded that, with the increasing
number
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 of flying travellers, both companies and single citizens
,
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 should give their contribute, aimed to reduce the increasing problems on the environment.

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structure
Make a clear plan before you write. Start with a short introduction that says what you will talk about, then 2 or 3 body parts, then a short conclusion.
coherence
Use simple link words to show how ideas are linked, like first, also, but, then.
coherence
Be clear on the cause and the result. Show how more flights raise pollution, then say what we can do.
task
Make a strong view in the start and finish with a clear end line that restates your view.
examples
Give a real example or a small fact to back your point.
content
Clear aim to state the problem and to give fix.
style
Easy to read with simple words.
structure
There is a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • global warming
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity loss
  • noise pollution
  • environmental pollution
  • sustainable aviation fuels
  • efficient engines
  • governmental policies
  • emissions standards
  • carbon offsetting
  • eco-tourism
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • carbon footprint
  • carbon capture technology
  • electric aircraft
  • wildlife habitats
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