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Topic: Aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Air
transport
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 of some fresh fruit and vegetables to different Countries, where they would be difficult to find for different reasons, is a growing and sustainable idea for most part of people.
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other
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ones
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believe that
this
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 can determine several problems. I strongly agree with the
the
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use of
aircrafts
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aircraft
 for the
transport
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 of fresh veggies, in order to support
general
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 economy and
,
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 for other reasons. First of all, many countries aren't able to provide enough
food
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 for their citizens.
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, acquiring fresh
food
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 for other regions or Nations could be of paramount importance, particularly in some periods of the year.
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, some plants can grow only in selected places or under
determined
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 temperatures. For
istance
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instance
, tropical plants are hard to grow in Europe or in Canada, but bananas are one of the most eaten fruits,
during
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all
the
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year
in
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 most
part
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parts
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 of the world. Only with the help of
aircrafts
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aircraft
, they can be transported and
selled
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sold
 everywhere. 
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, air
trasport
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transport
 allows the consumption of fresh
food
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 everywhere
and
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,
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this
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 is an important support for
general
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 economy.
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, aircraft determine air pollution,
therefore
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this
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 kind of
transport
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 should be strictly regulated by each Government, in order to reduce problems
on
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 the general
enviroinment
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environment
. It can be concluded that, nowadays,
aircrafts
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aircraft
 represent a valid and sustainable vehicle in order to
transport
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 fresh
food
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 and veggies
with
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in
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reasonable
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a reasonable
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times
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time
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, around the world.

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coherence
Put one clear main idea in each paragraph and use simple linking words to show how ideas go together.
grammar
Fix big grammar mistakes and spell common words right to make the read easy.
task
State your view plainly in the first paragraph and give one strong example for each side to show your point.
content
The writer gives a view on both sides and states an opinion.
structure
There is a clear ending that sums up the thought.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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