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Your friend from overseas is coming to visit you next month. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell them what they need to bring tell them what they will be doing during the time they are visiting warn them about some things that might be challenging

Hey Roman, I’m really happy to hear that you’re coming next week to visit me. I just wanted to share a few tips so your stay in Moga is as smooth and comfortable as possible. Before you travel, please bring a universal adapter because the plug type here is different.
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, the air quality hasn’t been great lately, so it would be a good idea to pack a few extra face masks, especially for long journeys and crowded places.
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 you’re here, we’ll do plenty of sightseeing. I’m planning to book tickets for the Taj Mahal, which will be an 8–10 hour train trip. We can
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 visit some other famous places during your visit,
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 as the Rose Garden and India Gate, and of
course
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 we’ll try lots of local food. One thing I should warn you about is the traffic. Many people don’t follow rules properly, and the roads can feel chaotic and unsafe. Don’t worry
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—we’ll use trains or trusted taxis most of the time, so we should be fine. I’m looking forward to seeing you soon! Best wishes, Prabh

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strength
You covered all parts: what to bring, what you will do, and a warning. This is good for task response.
improvement
To push to a higher band, try to make one idea per paragraph and give a short plan with dates.
improvement
Use simple link words like Also or Then to help flow between parts.
task response
Clear list of what to bring.
coherence
Friendly tone and warm closing.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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