The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth,Australia for the years 20o4 -2014.

The table illustrates the quantities of locally caught and imported fresh fish in Perth, Australia,over the period from 2004 to 2014.
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, the total supply rose
initially
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before declining, with local catches always occupying the majority of the supply over the decade. Meanwhile, local catches peaked in 2008,
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imports reached the highest level in 2012. In detail, local catches started at 2677.7 metric
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in 2004 and climbed steadily to a peak at 8136.2 metric
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in 2008, before consistently falling
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2014
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5031.9 metric
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,the total supply of
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fish increased from 3142.2 metric
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in 2004 to a high of 8949
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in 2009, driven by the surge in local catches. After 2009, the total figures decreased, reaching 5814.7 metric
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in 2004.
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, fish imports showed a more fluctuating trend, beginning at a relatively low 464.5metric
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in 2004,
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dropping to the lowest level at 231.6 metric
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in 2005. In 2012,
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reached the highest point at 1227.3 metric
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,
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falling to 782.7 metric
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tons in
2014.

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