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The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart illustrates the spending of the
UAE
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government
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 in the year 2000 with a total
budget
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 of AED 315
billion
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.
Overall
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, the
UAE
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government
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 was able to allocate the total
budget
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 money into 10 different categories. The largest sum of the
budget
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 goes to social security, which
account
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accounts
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 for AED 100
billion
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,
whereas
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 the
budget
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 spent on transportation
only
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apply
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account
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accounts
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 for
AED
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only AED
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 9
billion
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. The
UAE
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government
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's expenditure on social security is almost half of the total
budget
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.
However
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, with the other AED 215
billion
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, the
UAE
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government
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 was able to allocate to 9 other categories. The
government
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 spent about AED 53
billion
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 on health and personal social services, AED 38
billion
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 on Education, 23 AED
billion
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 on debt interest, AED 15
billion
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 on housing the heritage and environment, AED 17
billion
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 on law and order, AED 13
billion
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 on industry, agriculture, and employment, AED 9
billion
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 on transportation, and
lastly
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 AED 23
billion
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 on other expenditure.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uae, government, budget, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • government
  • spending
  • billions
  • social development
  • infrastructure
  • defense
  • security
  • healthcare
  • education
  • investment
  • citizen
  • focus
  • priority
  • sector
  • emphasis
  • facilities
  • transport
  • well-being
  • future
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