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The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of households living in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overall
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, home
ownership
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 increased significantly during the period,
while
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 the proportion of rented households declined. The two figures were equal in 1971. In 1918, around 78% of households lived in rented accommodation,
whereas
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 only about 22% owned their homes. The percentage of home
ownership
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 gradually increased over the following decades, reaching approximately 50% in 1971. After 1971,
ownership
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 continued to rise and peaked at about 69% in 2001.
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, the proportion of rented homes steadily decreased from nearly 80% in 1918 to roughly 31% in 2001. By 2011,
ownership
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 slightly declined to around 65%,
while
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 renting increased modestly to about 36%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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