Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter: say in general what you like about shopping in your area say what is wrong with the facilities suggest how they can be improved

Dear Sir, I am writing
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epistle to inform you about the issues faced during shopping in my area. I am currently residing in Toronto Downtown. The location where I live is famous for shopping and weekend fun. There are a lot of local and branded shops near my apartment. Whenever I get bored, I go to the nearby
mall
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named Lorney, where I find everything under one roof, which is why
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mall
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is my favourite one. Actually, I have been facing parking issues in
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mall
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. I prefer going there during non-rush hours, but I still do not get a parking spot nearby.
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, I have to park my car in the paid parking located 2 kilometres away.
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, traffic
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gets jammed in that area
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the lack of parking.
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, it would be great if the parking area of the
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were increased.
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, allowing people to park nearby
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will save
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time and money. Looking forward to a favourable response from you. Yours faithfully, James

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task response
For task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more about what you like in your area, not only the mall.
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