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Band 4.5

More and more people prefer to read e-books rather than paper books. What are the reasons for this? What problems can this cause for libraries?

Many book readers
preferring
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 to read books online
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then
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rather than
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 reading
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them
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 from
actual
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an actual
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 book. The biggest reason for
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 is technological progress
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 has made it easy and convenient
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 every user
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 It may leave negative impacts on established libraries
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such
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 as
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 loosing it's cultural value and permanent closure.
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, technology
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 become an indispensable part of
humans
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human
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 life's and it's changing things rapidly, and it is
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 one of the main
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reasons
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 why modern book readers prefer e-books. Not only is
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 option cheap
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 very convenient. Enthusiastic readers can have access to their favourite articles and stories at any time by
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logging
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 in to reading apps.
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, many people read their favourite articles
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 commuting to work or waiting for someone at
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the bus
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 station. There are many applications
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 very popular for e-reading
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such
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, such
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 as Kindle and Readspot
etc
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, etc
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. Given that, excessive use of these digital apps may lead to some detrimental
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 on reading institutes.
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 excessive reliance on e-books, students and others may stop visiting
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the library
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 in
coming
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the coming
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 years. Not only will it
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 its
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significance
 but
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 a cultural value.
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,
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 will results as a loss in revenue and high
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maintenance
 costs to keep these
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establishments
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 going.
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, Helcyon Library in Shimla City, which is very famous for
it's
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 antique collection of books
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, and
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and it
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apply
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has
recoreded
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recorded
 the lowest
numbers
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number
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 of scholars appearing in 2025, and
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one key reason for
this
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 is
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digital platforms. In conclusion, e-commerce applications have made reading easy and affordable to every
individuals
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individual
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,
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Nonetheless
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, it's leaving a negative impression on prestigious libararies which may get shut down in future.

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. You explain why people use e-books, but the library problems part needs one more clear point.
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Make your ideas more clear. Some lines are hard to follow because of word form and grammar problems.
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Use examples that feel more real and easy to trust. Keep them short and linked to your main point.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. Keep this shape.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way. Sometimes the jump from one idea to the next is too fast.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with one clear reason and one clear result.
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You answered both questions in the task.
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You gave clear main reasons like ease, low cost, and access at any time.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphs well, with an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas stay on the same topic in each paragraph.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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